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    Post by Haruka May on Tue Nov 27, 2007 11:40 pm

    Naughty or Nice

    A/N: I wanted to get this out before Christmas so…here we go peoples! Hope you like it! By the way, sorry if May’s POV is screwed up, it is my first time making a whole story by just one person’s POV. [May might be cursing a lot because she is stressed, so be a where of that.

    …:Note:... This is going to start at May’s apartment.

    Rating: PG-13

    Shippings: KissShipping, ContestShipping

    Disclaimer: I do not own pokemon, or my hair apparently…

    Dedication: I thought ‘bout this a lot and decided to dedicate this story to…LovelyVulpix34.

    My Horrible Life (Prologue)

    May’s P.O.V

    I could not believe it! I had gotten fired from my job, again! This was the second time in three weeks; she could not go on living like this- oh god! Damn it! Waking up from my thoughts, my blue eyes scanned the room in search of my purse; after looking for a while, I found it and started to dump all the materials out.

    “Why does this always happen to me?!” Arg, seriously! I am always doing the right thing, like volunteering in the shelter, donating what little extra money I have, even making sandwiches for the poor! Wait…I am supposed to be looking for some cash right now…

    Finally, after practically emptying my apartment of cash, I had enough money to pay the monthly rent…well, that’s for this month anyways, at the rate I am loosing my jobs; I’d probably be out of cash before you could say, ‘Baby Bottoms Bungee Jumpers’. Why you would say that, I have not a clue.

    “I need to find a job that will stick with me…maybe I should ask Melody! She has a job in that play thing…” Yeah… Melody was always telling her that she should call her if she wanted to be in it. Hm…maybe today would be her lucky day.

    “Okay…I’m going to call Melody; than go out to the park for some fresh air,” Sighing, I started to look for the phone, which had as usual been misplaced.

    “Shit. Where is the fucking phone?” Okay…so maybe this was not my lucky day. However, it will turn up…eventually. I hope it is eventually soon! I want to start this before I run out of food…which runs out pretty fast I might add.

    “Ding! Ding! Ding! Ding!” Surprised by the sound of the phone, I jump back knocking down some books on the table… oh who cares. I will pick them up later; right now, I have to focus on finding that stupid phone….

    “Hello? May? Are you there and just ignoring me?” The sound of that familiar voice filled my head, hey what a coincidence! It was Melody! Just the person I needed to talk to; now if only I could find the goddamn phone!

    “May! I’m going to hang-up if you don’t answer!” Hey, what is that cord…? Oh, it is the phone. I should pay more attention to these things… ops, lost my train of thought again; have to answer Melody.

    “Hello Melody! Sorry I didn’t answer sooner, I sort of lost the phone again…” I could hear her laughter ringing in the phone; of course, she knew I constantly lost the phone, but she always thought it was so funny for some reason…humph…

    “Well, anyways May, I called because there was just an opening in one of our plays, so…I was wondering if you would like to audition for it with me?” she said after her giggles had stifled; once I heard what she said, I began to do a happy dance, squealing, I spoke, “I cannot believe this Melody! It was as if you read my mind or something! I was just about to call you asking if there were any spots open!” Boy was I happy! The only way this could be any better was if I had some chocolate…or ramen…

    “Hey May, why don’t you come to my house and we could make some ramen while practicing?” Wow. That is almost unbelievable. Who would have guessed that being fired would be such a good thing? Not me that is for sure…

    “Sure, I would love to! First let me change…then I’ll be right over!” I paused to get her confirmation, which was a quick “Okay,” so after another fast good-bye I hung up the phone. Well, there goes my park plans.

    “So…what should I wear today?” stalking over to my closet I looked down at my faded jeans and plain red t-shirt; I shook my head in disapproval. “Can’t wear the same thing two days in a row,” I muttered.

    Opening the closet door I looked around from messy corner to messy corner, picking up a V-Neck red tank top I sniffed it, “Eh…smells clean enough,” Eyeing a jean skirt that was on the ground, I grabbed it and went on-ward to the bathroom. Looking in the mirror, I smiled.

    “Maybe this job will work out…well, if I get it anyways.” After brushing my hair, teeth, and taking a shower I exited the bathroom with my outfit, the V-Neck red tank top, jean skirt, and black flip-flops.

    “I cannot wait to get to Melody’s house,” I squealed; grabbing my purse, I opened the door to be greeted by a blast of sunshine. Yes, this was going to be a great day!

    After walking down what seemed to be ten hundred flights of stairs, I finally got to my car. The beat up yellow Keya was all I could afford now, but hey, as long as it had four wheels and an engine.

    Climbing into the car, I took out my keys and tired to start the engine, which, obviously failed, great day my ass. Getting out of the car I walked over to the back, and opening the door(or whatever you call it) I looked to see what was wrong, and surely enough; there was a piece of cheese, cheese, stuck in my engine. Quickly I took the cheese by the thumb and index finger; disgusted I flicked it away, getting back into the car.

    “Finally,” I mumbled, as I heard the quiet purring of the engine, taking off on the road I turned on the radio.

    “And today folks, we will be…” They music drained on in my head as I stopped at a red light, starting to drift off into my own thoughts again. Suddenly, I heard a honk, ops, looking in the rear view mirror I caught a gleams of green, green hair I think, before driving off again. While driving I now had a new question running through my mind, “Who has green hair?”

    A/N: Well? Did you like it? I personally thought it was one of my best yet! D But anyways, please inform me if there were any grammar, punication, or spelling errors; if the characters were IC (sorry about Melody, I will try and find more info on her in whatever it’s called.)


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    Post by Mr. Schwibbles on Tue Nov 27, 2007 11:52 pm

    HOLY CRAP THIS IS THE BEST FAN FICTION OF YOURS I'VE EVER READ! AND I THOUGHT MY WEEK WITH DREW WAS AWESOME-NESS!!!!! *faints*

    *Has spaz attack tiilll*

    Okay! *coughs*

    Wow, this is truley your best work by far. The punctuation of this story really reminds me of this really good book called Go Ask Alice, and it too, is written in first person. One thing, though, that I really need to point out is the rating. You need to add that in. But, I love you,so I won't hold it against you! Very Happy

    Well, I got to get ready or school as it is 7:50 am, so toodles! *waves*

    Keep Writing Your Good Chappies and Keep Smiling! Very Happy

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    Post by GenderDefender on Wed Nov 28, 2007 9:17 am

    i dont understand... Sad
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    Post by Mr. Schwibbles on Wed Nov 28, 2007 9:21 am

    She's writing from first person and sometimes alters to third person but yeah, you'll get it soon enough hun. Let my holy benevolent thumbs be with you --> d ^.^ b


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    Post by Haruka May on Sat Feb 16, 2008 3:34 am

    Naughty or Nice

    A/N: Hm… I got this up sooner than I had excepted. Anyways, thanks to all the people who reviewed and for all the corrections you gave me! It really helped me improve my writing skills. :3 Okay, well, disclaimer time!

    Disclaimer: Okay, when evil fuzzy bunnies take over the world- I own pokemon.

    Fun Fact: Did you know “Scheisse” means S*** in German? Yeah, Melody’s going to use that word later on. xD [And yes Julia I know you did.

    Meeting the Snob

    May’s P.O.V

    After almost two accidents and three wrong turns (how did I get my drivers license again?) I made my way to Melody’s hotel; pulling my car into one of the parking spaces, gazed at the beautiful building in front of me. I wonder how she can afford to live here… Anyways, opening my car door, I step out to be greeted once again by the Florida sunshine.

    “What was her apartment number again?” I asked myself out loud; arg, why do I have to be so forgetful? Digging in my jean skirt for a piece of paper I might have written Melody’s suite number on, I unfortunately found nothing, well, besides my cell phone and five stupid dollars.

    Suddenly, a blue Italian (from what I could tell…) sports car pulled up in one of the empty parking spaces. Since I don’t know what else to do, I stroll over to the man coming out of the car, to see if he knows my friends suite number. When I get a good look at him, I gasp. Isn’t he the weird green haired man that honked at me before?!

    “Well? What do you want?” asked the green haired man; checking him out as he spoke, I could see he seemed to be wearing a purple T-shirt with long turquoise pants, his hair was pretty long as well, slightly covering his emerald eyes. In short- he was hott.

    “Um… hi I’m May!” Wow. Do I sound like an idiot or what?

    “Look lady, I don’t want to hear it; please, just take your pictures and leave me alone.” When he was done with his little speech, he flipped his emerald hair; while I started to fume. Who did this guy think he was?!

    “What! I have no idea what I did to you! All I did was tell you my name!” Great, I piss him off without even saying five words- isn’t that such a wonderful start?

    “Okay, I don’t have time for this, so tell me what you want or get out of my way.” Gee, he is rude. But right now he is my only chance; so here goes everything…

    “Well, um… you see I was sort of hoping that you knew my friend Melody’s suite number…” I said; I could feel the heat rushing to my face, maybe I should have asked the person at the hotel desk… mentally slapping myself I realized that was what I should have done in the first place.

    “23. And by the way, the names Drew,” He winked at me; walked inside the hotel seconds later, while I was just frozen to the spot. Evidently though, I soon got a hold of myself and walked inside the hotel as well, fortunately not seeing a gleam of green hair. Thank god. Getting inside the elevator the bell boy started to speak.

    “Hello Madame, what floor?” Um… number 23 so…

    “Second floor please,”

    “Okay, going up,” And with that, the elevator took off, but within a minute later, I was on the second floor and getting off the elevator; muttering a quick ‘Goodbye’ to the bell boy.

    “ 20, 21, 22, 23!” I mutter to myself; stopping in front of the door, I knock. Gradually, I hear foot steps approaching the door; no doubt they were Melody’s.

    I can hear Melody’s muffed voice speak, “Who is it?” of course, me being me, answer with a, “May!” hearing the locked clip un-locked I wait for the door to open. It does, but unfortunately, I’m right in front of the, ‘Melody hugging zone’

    “Hi May! I’m surprised you didn’t get lost this time!” she says, releasing me from her bone-crashing hug, I act insulted, putting my hand to my chest and doing a dramatic gasp; going inside the hotel room, sit on one of the love seats. [Melody closed the door soon after.

    “How rude!” Okay…well, I didn’t get lost this time! I got smarter and asked that ‘Drew’ guy for directions. Yeah, I’m happy now, sitting in a nice comfy seat and in a nice cool room.

    “Hey May, do you mind if some else from the play comes and practices with us? He’s Santa Clause you know.” says Melody in a knowingly voice, I laugh a little, I stopped believe in Santa when I was twelve! …Okay, okay, seventeen gees…

    “Okay, cool! So when is he going to be here?” I ask, I really want to start practicing!

    “Don’t worry May, I think he should be here in another minute…” just as Melody says this, there is another knock on the door; jumping up in surprise, I hear Melody giggle.

    “Well, that’s Drew!” I freeze. Did she just say Drew?! Oh crap. Oh crap. Oh crap. Oh crap. I can see Melody opening up the door again; maybe it’s a different Drew I think, well, until I see green hair. Drew is inside the building people, inside the building.

    After Drew comes inside the room, I stop to think for a minute; realizing that all the things added up to this, he was going to the same hotel and he knew Melody’s suite number, I mentally slap myself again, how would he know Melody’s suite number unless he knew Melody!

    “All right, Drew, this is-” before Melody could finish, Drew cut her off, how rude of him.

    “Yeah, I know who this is, May right?” Drew says smirking and flipping his hair; the arrogant son of a-

    “May, you know you’re talking out loud right?” says Melody, ops, that is my bad… glancing at Drew, I sigh.

    “Yeah…” Evil Drew, keeps smirking in my direction.

    “Well, lets get to practicing!” says Melody, she always was one to get into stuff like this.

    “Okay, so who is May going to be?” snickered Drew, (Although I think mean and weird green haired man would suite him better, but ‘Drew’ is shorter) taking out some packet of papers, as did Melody. (Except she had two packets)

    “May is going to be…” Melody pauses for a moment to look at the script, “She can be one of the elves!” An elf? How cool! I get to make all the hot chocolate and cookies! (To bad I cannot cook…)

    “Wonderful!” I say, Melody smiles and hands me a script, I make a face; how am I going to memorize all of this! I cannot even memorize Melody’s suite number!

    “Good luck memorizing all of that May- you will need it.” I fume at his comment, while Melody only giggles. “I think I could use that ramen now…” I think while starting to sulk.

    A/N: Wow, poor May. Think she can memorize all that? …Yeah, I don’t think so either, but eh. That’s live. Well, hope you enjoyed.
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    Post by JbstormburstADV on Tue Feb 19, 2008 2:27 pm

    Is it me, or is this story becoming increasingly satirical? I mean, May normally isn't put in a situation like this. I know. I have read over 300 AdvanceShiping fanfics, so I can get the general idea that May usually is the smart one. Anyways, I can't believe I'm reading this, since it's ContestShipping, and well, you know from the avatar, I guess.

    Now, I'm impressed, because normally many people have trouble writing in first-person, but you made it seem easy for you, and it's perfect in terms of grammar. If only it was AdvanceShipping.... Oh well, don't fondle over what is lost. Well, see ya!!!

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    Post by Aki on Tue Mar 18, 2008 11:01 pm

    This is quite good, I'm impressed. You have my thumbs too. b^_^d cheers cheers cheers cheers

    I WOULD put my Fullmetal Alchemist fanfic up... Smile

    ...but sadly... Crying or Very sad

    I'm in the evil writer's block. Sad


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    Post by Mr. Schwibbles on Wed Mar 19, 2008 10:23 am

    Augh, I know how you feel. Though I've been having writer's block since sixth grade. That's friggin TWO WHOLE YEARS! No


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    Post by Aki on Wed Mar 19, 2008 10:37 pm

    AbsoluteAnimeAdmirer wrote:Augh, I know how you feel. Though I've been having writer's block since sixth grade. That's friggin TWO WHOLE YEARS! No

    Well that must completely suck.


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    Post by Mr. Schwibbles on Thu Mar 20, 2008 8:40 am

    Yeah, at least I can still acheive constant 'A's in English, fortunately.


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    Post by Haruka May on Sat Mar 29, 2008 4:19 am

    Naughty or Nice

    Authors Note: Hey… an update. XD Sorry for such the long wait, been focusing on my other story, “My Week with Drew”. Anyways, enjoy!

    Disclaimer: Me owning pokemon is about as likely as you finding your house to be made of chocolate. Although, if that does happen, contact me!

    P.S. I don’t know why I wrote “P.S.”…

    Apprehending the Inapprehensive

    May’s P.O.V

    “Here, let me go and make that ramen for you,” said Melody in sympathy, she is such a good friend… I have to remember to get her an extra special birthday present…

    “So May, have you acted before?” asked Drew casually; having had sat down on a love seat, he leaned back. If he thought I would just forget how rude he was, he better think twice.

    “No I haven’t, but I’m sure I can manage thank you very much,” I said, scoffing at him. Although, at first glance I thought I saw him look offended.

    “I guess we can be thankful you aren’t a main role then; or even a supporting role for that matter.” Ha! Look offended my ass! That little green haired bastard… Anyways, if he thinks he’s going to win this argument he’s wrong!

    “Well, at least my character isn’t old and fat!” Hm… looks like I’m getting better at this!

    “Huh, I never pictured you as the naughty type,” said Drew, now he was leaning a farther away from his seat and closer to… me?! Yuck, what is that guy trying to pull? Just because he’s hot… and cute… and is an actor… man! Stop thinking like this May! …When did he get so close?

    “I made ramen for everyone!” Surprised, I jumped a little, apparently hitting my head against with Drew’s…

    “Ow…” I groaned, turning my head to Melody, who was now giggling at my pain, the nerve. I was going to buy her an excellent birthday present too! Of course I don’t know what that is yet….

    “Are you guys okay?” I could hear Melody say after her giggles had stifled. Drew just groaned in response while rubbing his sore head. Psh, come on, it was his fault anyways; he was the one who leaned forward, not me…

    “Yeah, I’m fine, don’t know about Meany Greeny over there though,” Okay, I’m pouting, but he did make me bump my head!

    “Meany Greeny?” I could hear another one of Melody’s giggles, looking at Drew I could see his face was in a scowl and he was glaring at Melody, maybe I should copy him.

    “That’s so cute May! Like a pet name!” What the hell. Some friend. Although maybe… No. Never!

    “Like hell,” Took the words right out my mouth, “Like hell, I would go out with a girl like her,” Not! And oh ho ho! Weren’t you just coming on to me?

    “And what’s that suppose to mean?” I’m so not letting this go.

    “It’s mean that you’re a no talent wannabe who probably doesn’t even care about theater, and just wants some money to pay for her apartment,” …Wow. Right on the dot! Now, I’m glancing at Melody, hopefully she jumps in…. any time now…

    “Drew, not everyone is as “passion” about theater as you, besides, what’s wrong with wanting to pay the rent?” Ha-ha! Go Melody!

    “Hm, I guess you’re right Melody, not everyone has the brains to be passionate about stuff that truly matters,” He flips his hair damn; probably mocking me.

    “For your information Drew I am very smart!” He raising his eyebrow and smirking at me… not good…

    “Who says I was talking about you?”

    …Well there’s that interpretation.

    Now, I scoff. I’m not going to let that arrogant asshole win this argument! “Well, I could just tell you were implying that it was me!”

    “Hm. Well, I wasn’t. So, could we get back to the script?” Gr… the nerve of that guy.


    “Hey May, you still want your ramen right?” Hey, when did Melody put the ramen down?

    xXxXxXxXxXxX

    Great, I’ve almost memorize a line! And the play is in ten days! Anyways, let me start from the beginning, after Melody had finally pasted out the ramen, of course, I started to eat it. Unfortunately, it was too hot, and I ended up burning my tongue. Then, we started practicing, and Drew started to insult me constantly! Saying I was bad, couldn’t act, etc; after what seemed like hours (which turned out to be only one hour) Drew said that he had to go do something and he would see us at the “rehearsal” thing they had… What am I doing now you ask? Why, shopping with Melody!

    “Oh my gosh, May look at that skirt! Want to go see if they have my size?” asked Melody grinning, I nod. Boy we haven’t don’t this in awhile.

    Now inside the store, Melody goes to the nearest store employee while I take a look at that baby blue blouse…

    “That is just the best blouse I have ever seen!” Suddenly, I hear a loud, “Scheisse” startled, I look over to where Melody is at and can see her disappointed and pissed expression.

    “Come on May! Let’s get out of this place,” Melody takes my arm and drags me out of the store, leaving me to wave good bye to the pretty blouse…

    Once outside the store, I ask Melody to explain. “That guy said they didn’t have my size, I was fine with that, but just when I was about to leave he practically called me fat!” Oh… no wonder she was so upset; I would be too.

    “That stupid guy doesn’t know what he is talking about! You are anything but fat Melody!”

    “Come on; let’s go to your favorite book store…”

    xXxXxXxXxXxX

    Inside the book store, Melody soon became happier, making me happier as well. And in turn, she wandered off to venture to the Romance section, where she is usually at.

    “Man… I know Melody loves the bookstore, but it’s so boring!” I mumble to myself, or at least I thought it was myself.

    “Why am I not surprised you don’t like the bookstore?” Turning to the snide voice, I gasp. Isn’t that Drew?

    “What are you doing here?” I say surprised, I thought he had something to do?

    “I thought you had something to do?” I ask, not that it’s any of my business… but I’m curious.

    “Well, not that it is any of your business, I was reading the novel version of Santa Clause, you know, doing research on my part.” Wow… although being a smartass is annoying, he pulls it off…

    “Oh… well, that’s cool,” Crap… I got to get out of here before I start thinking he’s sexy!

    “Um, I have to go,” Great, I’m rushing off because of some guy!

    “Oh May! I just found the greatest romance novel ever! It’s called Smart Mouth, ever heard of it?” hearing Melody’s voice, I turned around and rushed up to her.

    “Come on Melody, let’s get out of here!” With that, I grabbed Melody’s arm and dragged her out, to bad she was still carrying the book…

    “Ding! Ding! Ding!” I could hear the sound of the alarm sounding off, and suddenly, was grabbed by the arm.

    “You two are in big trouble…”

    Authors Note: Oh my chocolate… after four whole months of waiting, you finally have the next chapter. Feel Special. Anyways, what do you think is going to happen now that Melody and May have gotten caught shop lifting? And what about Drew?
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    Post by Mr. Schwibbles on Sat Apr 05, 2008 11:12 am

    OHHH! Yay, next chapter! ^^

    I can't reply for long, but great scenario hun... man, I really do wonder what will happen to May after this point.

    Great Chapter as always, Keep Smiling! Very Happy

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